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Subject: [OM] Re: hello
From: Marc Lawrence <montsnmags@xxxxxxxxx>
Date: Sun, 20 Apr 2008 15:57:44 +1000
Gordon Ross wrote:
> Am I legend????
> 
> where did OM go??

Not a very good haiku, Gordon - no kigo, insufficient on, explicit 
self-reference, unnecessary repetition of eroteme as kireji.

Perhaps trying your hand at senryu will be more to your liking.

Cheers,
Marc (possibly provoking poetic pedantry)
Noosa Heads, Oz

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